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Entanglement It's hard to tell
Where I start
The sheets end
And where we begin
To mesh together
Riot Time Warm grass tickles my neck
And the sliver of stomach showing;
Bright sunbeams embrace my skin,
And the dark jeans I refuse to not wear
My hair turns golden; my skin freckles,
Missing the attention of light.
Frozen misdemeanors defrost,
And hibernating ambitions find their place
Back in my summer-humming head.
Untitled...II Chapter II

Nyx wasn't used to this. She looked across the table to see a lost, vulnerable girl stare at the napkins. Sky was always the confident one. Sky was always the one in control of everything. Nyx didn't know how to handle things now that Sky was…gone. At least in the sense that Sky was not capable of functioning.
"What would Sky do? What would Sky do?" Nyx couldn't help thinking. How does one solve this? She absentmindedly pulled at her just barely shoulder length, curly blonde hair.
She tried to smile encouragingly at Sky. Sky looked so awkward within herself.
"What will you have ladies?" the waitress to the local restaurant, Hen
Untitled...I Chapter I

She pulled on something that was way too large, bland and gray to sleep in. She just wanted to melt away in her comforter.
"Blek," she moaned. No one in the empty room replied.
"Blek," she complained again. Not that she expected anyone to answer; she merely needed to get it out of her body and out of her mind.
She didn't remember feeling this, "Narsty," she replied to herself. It had been a long time.
"Blek," she said a third time, more forcefully than the other times, rolling her eyes at herself.
"Loser," she scoffed at herself.
"I completely agree, Skylar," the, what she though was an empty room replied.
"Jesus, wha

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Written On the Stall

by ~RhondaElizabeth

           A frown marred her pristine features. Maria read the crude writing on the bathroom stall: Kristen is fat. Jason’s a hottie. Maria’s a fag. That one sullied her. Maria could only muse one thought, “At least I understand.” She took a pen to the stall, “And damn proud of it.”
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We had to write a 50 word short story.

This is the product.

[edit] This seems to be my most popular work and my editing it. It's not extremely different because I had invisioned it a certain way and I wanted to stay true to that.

I also think the beauty of it is the power of the message in only 50 words.

It was important to me.
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Written On the Stall by ~RhondaElizabeth was literally one of *WordCount's first ever features, this flash fiction (50 words) is as impressive as ever. Maria looks an 'insult' straight in the eye, and renders it powerless with 5 simple words. She's a real class act. ( Suggested by `Iscariot-Priest and Featured by `StJoan )
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~SawltheHedgehog Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
is this a journal entry?
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~calivinguy May 20, 2009
Wow. This is pretty awesome. It's hard to write these pieces (known as Double Nickles), but you certainly nailed it.
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Mood: Love ~Chocobelle Feb 26, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
saw this ages ago before i became a member. absolutely LOVED it!
there's so much power in such a small amout of words. its amazing :love:

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~under-raindrops Oct 16, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Hi! Just wanted to let you know that you're featured here --> [link]

Hope you're having a lovely day :heart:

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Dede xx
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*Wandering-wolves Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful...just beautiful.:)

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Mood: Joy ~Giruveganus Aug 12, 2008
Ooh, somebody just got ZINGED! That was awesome and witty. And kudos for writing something so good with only 50 words. I struggled with a 500 word essay.

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"Mario, what do we do?

> Save the egg.
> Let there be hot dogs.
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~Shake-Hips-Not-Fists Aug 12, 2008
Wow, this is truly amazing. As a writer, I look up to you completely. I absolutely love this piece and I hope someday I can be as talented a writer as you.

...Ok, that sounded way too suck-uppish to be me, but it got my general feelings down. This (assignment?) was amazing and not what i expected from the preview. I want to say good job, but it would feel a bit degrading coming from me. Eh, whatever: Great job!
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~Carousel-Dreams Aug 12, 2008
A very powerful piece of work with strong meaning-love it

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"Everything in the world is about sex except sex. Sex is about power."
— Oscar Wilde
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*EatingMyOwnFears Aug 12, 2008
haha!

beautiful!

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"she was eatin' tootie fruities when her head exploded,
blood and brains and milk and rainbow painted the walls..."
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!Eareph Aug 12, 2008
Impressive, word counts are hard things to do especially the less words you can use. But I think you did everything right and its flow is very smooth and I loved the ending, very modern. :thumbsup:

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